How to Improve Your Script (and Write Better Dialogue)

In 2024 I started some online workshops on writing and directing, and they proved very popular. I had loads of feedback from people saying how they had helped them shake something loose in their script/gave them more confidence ahead of setting foot on set of their next film, so here we are.

In this workshop, we'll focus on what can make your script better, from dialogue, exposition, tricks to deal with when you know it needs improving but don't know how to, and many more. I'll go through my process, and we'll also look at some written examples, specifically created for this workshop, so that you'll leave with a better understanding of how to apply the techniques to your own work.

I should point out, I use the same method for feature writing, only.... there's more of it! This workshop would also be useful if you're a filmmaker working on a feature script.

Throughout I will be referring to some of my short films as specific examples of where choices were made and to highlight the lessons involved. Links are below.

When you sign up you'll be given a bunch of materials, including both a good and bad version of 'The Lucky Horseshoe' - two scripts written as an exercise to rip into guilt-free. Afterwards, you'll get a copy of the presentation, a recording of the session as well as some extra follow-up materials.

At the end of the session is a Q&A where we can get as specific or as broad as you like when it comes to writing. After the session you get a recording of it, plus the presentation, and some other materials to help you on your way.

For testimonials have a peek on my instagram @themausoliam or have a gander below.

Who is Liam to lead such a workshop?

I was selected as one of the Screen Stars of Tomorrow 2025, and one of 15 filmmakers for the BFI Network@LFF cohort in 2024.

My last short Housewarming was BIFA nominated in 2024, and won Best UK Short at Raindance 2024. Barry Ward won Best Actor at Manchester Film Festival 2025.

My previous short, Punch-Drunk, was BAFTA-longlisted in 2022. I have a feature in development with Escape Plan (Love Lies Bleeding), and other projects, both short and feature, in development.

Proof of the Pudding:

HOUSEWARMING

Short of the Week https://www.shortoftheweek.com/2025/02/17/housewarming/

Directors Notes https://directorsnotes.com/2024/06/20/liam-white-housewarming/

Vimeo https://vimeo.com/1057425514

Letterboxd https://letterboxd.com/film/housewarming-2024/

PUNCH-DRUNK

Vimeo https://vimeo.com/falsetoothfilms/punch-drunk

DOUGHNUT

Short of the Week https://shortoftheweek.com/2021/11/22/doughnut

TICK TICK TICK

Vimeo https://vimeo.com/360522251

Testimonials From Previous Workshops:

‘Listening to Liam was inspiring.’

‘I found it thorough and helpful. Has mainly inspired me to go out there and play with my own ideas.’

‘It was informative without being overwhelming. It felt like it could be practically applied and used.’

‘Thanks so much for the session. I found it really helpful in identifying what to focus on when writing, re-writing and collaborating.’

‘Seeing the journey from the point of view of someone who didn’t go to film school, who doesn’t have the money or leg up. It’s the practical advice needed!’

‘It was great to hear about Liam’s process as a writer and director’

‘Great session, really enjoyed it. Very insightful, and inspiring! Mid-way through the session I got several ideas for shorts.’